PEP小学英语六年级上册作文范例及点评5

概要：Planting TreesIt’s spring. It’s time to plant trees.I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First， we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later， my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast.We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.【要领点评】小作者写了一次植

Planting Trees

　　It’s spring. It’s time to plant trees.

　　I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First， we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later， my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast.

　　We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.

　　【要领点评】

　　小作者写了一次植树的经历，但他并没有单纯拘泥于植树的过程。既有过程，也有感觉，能使文章打动读者，给人以启发。作文的最后一段就非常好，两句话胜似千言万语。我们可以学习一下这种写法。

　　既描述过程，又适时提自己的看法或想法的写法，在作文中叫做“夹叙夹议”，描述过程为了提出一种思想服务，提出看法或想法使原本平实的描述有了意义。我们在以后的写作中也可以试一试。