PEP小学英语六年级下册作文范例及点评1

概要：My friend and II’ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I’m 11. He’s older than me. He’s 150 cm tall. I’m 148 cm. He’s taller and stronger. He’s 43 kg and I’m 41 kg. He’s heavier. We’ve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports， too. On Saturdays， we play table tennis. O

My friend and I

　　I’ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I’m 11. He’s older than me. He’s 150 cm tall. I’m 148 cm. He’s taller and stronger. He’s 43 kg and I’m 41 kg. He’s heavier. We’ve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports， too. On Saturdays， we play table tennis. On Sundays， we play basketball. He’s good at basketball. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are!

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　　写法：这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我”。既然写作范围是两个人物，就要笔墨均匀，两者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友，也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决这个难点的关键是：找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况，再进行比较，通过比较突出每个人物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。

　　时态：像此类题目的作文，运用一般现在时即可。

　　句型：因为涉及两个人的比较，不要忘记使用比较级句型：A+be+比较级+than+B。

　　注意：在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时，应一边列举，一边比较。不要一味指出不同，还要列举相同之处。两人能成为朋友，一定有共同语言和喜好，共性不容忽视。在表达喜好时，不同的句型应交叉运用，避免枯燥的重复。例“Our favourite colours are…”，“We like …best”，“We both like…，too”，为突出不同时间做不同运动，用“On Saturdays…”，“On Sundays…”，形成鲜明对比。常使用并列连词and 和转折连词 but ，使文章读起来更流畅。结尾以How happy we are!突出了两人从友谊中得到的快乐!