PEP小学英语六年级上册作文范例及点评1

概要：Li Ying ’S HobbyLi Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.Does she like dancing? No， she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her， too. She says her hobbies make her happy.【要领点评】这一篇写爱好的文章，小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习，他没有具体写到刘莹的某一种爱好，而是从学习到课余的多种爱好入手，对刘莹的各种爱好进行了粗线条地勾画.从&ldquo

Li Ying ’S Hobby

　　Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.

　　Does she like dancing? No， she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her， too. She says her hobbies make her happy.

　　【要领点评】

　　这一篇写爱好的文章，小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习，他没有具体写到刘莹的某一种爱好，而是从学习到课余的多种爱好入手，对刘莹的各种爱好进行了粗线条地勾画.从“爱好”这个角度来看刘莹的话，我们会觉得这个形象很饱满。

　　小朋友们写这种“叙事写人”作文时，可以从两个角度下手：一是具体地描绘;二是和上面小朋友一样，粗线条地勾画，二者各有所长，另处在行文中使用一些问句，使用一些转述的话，可以使作文更有灵气，避免了平铺直叙的缺点。比如上文的“Does she like dancing? No， she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不错的句子，使读者眼前为之一亮。